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新高考读后续写:两种动作描写结构

新高考读后续写:两种动作描写结构

第一部分、A, B and C结构


我们先看一下“A, B and C结构”。下面我用三个句子来说明这个结构,每个例子我将停顿三秒钟,正在听这个课程的你,你可以抓住这宝贵的三秒钟,快速思考,如果是自己来写,会怎么写?如果刚开始觉得有困难,可以先想中文思路。

第一句:“男孩们跳入湖中嬉戏”

想一想:跳入湖中,这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?

跳入湖里嬉戏 = 冲向湖边 + 脱掉衣服 + 跳入水中

    The boys rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and jumped into the water.(孩子们兴奋地冲到湖边,脱下衣服,跳进了水里。)

第二句,“她抱住儿子”(停顿三秒钟)

想一想:抱住儿子,这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?

 抱住儿子 = 冲向前 + 蹲下 + 一把抱住

She dashed forward, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.(她向前冲过去,跪下来,把儿子抱在怀里。)

第三句,“这个歌手唱歌”

想一想:歌手唱歌,这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?

   歌手唱歌 = 扫视观众 + 深吸一口气 + 开始演唱

   The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.(歌手瞥了看观众,深吸了一口气,开始唱歌。)

第二部分、使用非谓语


下面仍然用三种方式和三个句子来说明这种描写动作的句子结构,每个例子我仍然停顿三秒钟。

第一种句子模式:-ing现在分词,凸显同一对象同时发生不同的动作。

第1个例句,“老人静坐”

想一想:老人静坐,这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?(停顿三秒钟)好!我来公布参考答案。

老人静坐=坐在夕阳下 + 看报纸 + 听广播

The old man sat under the sunset, reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.

第二种句子模式:having done 表现动作先后关系

第2个例句,“没有买到票”

想一想:“买票”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?

没有买到票= 排了很久队 + 被告知票卖完了

 Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the ticket had been sold out. 

第三种句子模式. -ed过去分词凸显被动

 第3个例句,“孩子们哭了”

 想一想:“哭”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作?或者因为什么原因让孩子哭?

感动哭了= 被感动 + 哭了

Deeply moved by the story, the children began to cry.

训练篇

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

A young woman was waiting for her flight at an airport. She was leaving for London because she got a new job there. It was said that her new boss was a typical English gentleman----polite, modest, humorous and considerate. She was excited as well as a little nervous about her new life.

With several long hours before her flight, the woman hunted for a book in the airport shops, bought a packet of cookies and found a place to sit. She took out a book and started to read. Although she was absorbed in her book, she happened to see that the man sitting beside her, as bold(大胆的)as he could be, grabbed(抓)a cookie or two from the bag in between them. Educated to be well-mannered, she tried to ignore it to avoid an argument. But to show that she was the owner, she started to take cookies from that bag too. Unfortunately, the man didn't get that hint(暗示), since he didn't stop grabbing the cookies. 

"How annoying!" she thought. As the greedy cookie thief kept eating, the woman munched(用力咀嚼)some cookies and watched the clock.

She was getting angrier as the minutes went by, thinking, "If I weren't so nice, I would blacken his eyes." With each cookie she took, he took one, too; when only one was left, she wondered what he would do.

With a smile on his face, and a nervous laugh, he took the last cookie and broke it in half. He offered her a half, and ate the other. She grabbed it from him, glared at him and thought, "Oh, brother. This guy has some nerve and he is so rude! Why didn't he even show any gratefulness?"

She had never known when she had been so angry, and sighed in relief when her flight was called. She gathered her belongings and headed to the gate quickly, refusing to look back at the rude thief. She boarded the plane, sank in her seat, and looked for her book, which was almost complete. 

注意:

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语己为你写好;

Paragraph 1: As she reached in her baggage, she gasped(喘气) with surprise.

____________________________________________________

Paragraph 2: Surprisingly, she found the man sitting just behind her.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【写作特训】

1. With several long hours before her flight, the woman  ______________________________(在机场的商店里寻找一本书,买了一包饼干,然后找了个地方坐下) .

2. ______________________________(尽管她全神贯注于她的书), she happened to see that the man sitting beside her, as bold(大胆的)as he could be, grabbed(抓)a cookie or two from the bag in between them.

3. ______________________________(她受过良好礼貌的教育), she tried to ignore it to avoid an argument.

4. ______________________________(他脸上带着微笑,紧张地笑着), he took the last cookie and broke it in half.

5. She ______________________________(从他手里夺过它,瞪着他,心想), "Oh, brother. This guy has some nerve and he is so rude! Why didn't he even show any gratefulness?"

6. At that moment, ______________________________(她看见那包饼干), which had been just bought by her, unopened at all.

7. ______________________________(感到羞耻和像小偷一样), she finally got that the cookies were not hers but belonged to the man sitting next to her, who had calmly offered to share his last cookie with her.  

8. _____________________________(那女人完全不知所措) but gave the man a nervous laugh in return.

参考范文:

Paragraph 1:

As she reached in her baggage, she gasped with surprise. At that moment, in her sight came the packet of cookies, which had been just bought by her, unopened at all. Ashamed and feeling like a thief, she finally got that the cookies were not hers but belonged to the man sitting next to her, who had calmly offered to share his last cookie with her. A sudden rush of shy blood filling the face, she instinctively look around with the hope of finding the very man to make an apology.

Paragraph 2:

Surprisingly, she found the man sitting just behind her. He was just looking up and met her eyes, also with a smile on his face. The woman was at an absolute loss but gave the man a nervous laugh in return. With a quite open mouth, she was unable to say any apology to him. Murmuring “Sorry, sorry…It was I myself who was the real cookie thief.” After a while, she fell asleep on her seat with the plane flying steadily. The next day, when she arrived at her new company, the biggest surprise was waiting for her.

【写作特训答案】

1. With several long hours before her flight, the woman hunted for a book in the airport shops, bought a packet of cookies and found a place to sit.

2. Although she was absorbed in her book, she happened to see that the man sitting beside her, as bold(大胆的)as he could be, grabbed(抓)a cookie or two from the bag in between them.

3. Educated to be well-mannered, she tried to ignore it to avoid an argument.

4. With a smile on his face, and a nervous laugh, he took the last cookie and broke it in half.

5. She grabbed it from him, glared at him and thought, "Oh, brother. This guy has some nerve and he is so rude! Why didn't he even show any gratefulness?"

6. At that moment, in her sight came the packet of cookies, which had been just bought by her, unopened at all.

7. Ashamed and feeling like a thief, she finally got that the cookies were not hers but belonged to the man sitting next to her, who had calmly offered to share his last cookie with her.

8. The woman was at an absolute loss but gave the man a nervous laugh in return.

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